“The Birthday” by Mike McCormick

Dad was carrying a tray of grilled hot dogs across the fresh-cut grass when his knees stiffened and black smoke spewed from his nose. His shoulders lurched forward and his chin swung down and clanged against his chest as more and more black smoke billowed from his open mouth. There was a loud bang and a child’s scream as Dad crashed to the ground face-down, elbows pointed to the sky, his body still locked in the position of a man carrying a tray of hot dogs.

Mom herded the screaming kids into the kitchen and called my Uncle Steve who was there within ten minutes. In the meantime she pushed red candles into my cake and led a cheery chorus of “Happy Birthday” over the bangs that sounded from the backyard.

Uncle Steve came and ate a piece of my vanilla cake with his bare hands. He hugged Mom and leaned down and said Happy Birthday to me.

“Want to help me with your Pop for a moment?” he said.

Mom smiled and hung a cardboard donkey on the pantry door. Uncle Steve held the back door open and I walked through.

Dad was still smoking when we got to him. Sometimes a spark would flash in the air around his head. Uncle Steve gave me a metal box to hold and bent down to peer into Dad’s ear canal.

“Should we touch him?” I said.

“We’re going to have to” said Uncle Steve.

He went to work with his screwdriver, pliers, and some other tools I hadn’t seen before. It was only my tenth birthday. I didn’t know much about tools. I didn’t know much about Uncle Steve either, except that I thought he could probably read minds.

He banged around for a while, tugging at Dad’s arms and wrenching at something under his armpit. Then he leveraged a small instrument down Dad’s throat. He placed his finger between Dad’s teeth, feeling for something. Then he pulled and we heard a loud click.

“Aha!” he said.

Dad wasn’t smoking anymore. Uncle Steve knocked on the back of Dad’s neck, listening for a certain sound. The air around us began to clear. I could hear laughter coming from my house.

“Your Dad is gonna be fine, Nate.”

“What happened?” I said.

“He just overheated. My guess is he forgot to take his coolant this morning.”

I watched him twist a tiny flashlight on and aim it up Dad’s nose. He talked while he worked.

“Listen Nate,” he said. “I’m guessing you’ve never seen your Dad like this before. Don’t worry. In a minute, I’ll be done and he’ll be good as new. You know why I fix him up like this? Because he’d do the same for me, has done the same for me before.”

“How come we don’t take Dad to the doctor?” I said.

“Some people go to the doctor, and some cars go to the mechanic, right? But sometimes, you gotta take a car to the doctor, and a person has to go to the mechanic. You understand?”

I didn’t, so I started picking up the scattered hot dogs to be helpful.

“Sorry pal, I’m not being clear. How can I put it? Most people in this world, your mom, your grandmom, yourself, if you took them apart like, took away the outer layers, you’d be left with sponge and muscle and nerves and fibers, right? You learn about muscles in school?”

I nodded.

“Well, there’s other ways people come assembled. Some people, if you peeled away the outside, you’d just see leaves and roots and bark, you know? Some people are all saltwater and seaweed inside, if you can picture that. And some people like your dad and me, are a bit more on the mechanical side.”

“Okay,” I said.

“I’m almost done here, anyway. Why don’t you grab the rest of those hot dogs and chuck ‘em? We’ll make new ones after I finish up.”

I walked inside and threw the hot dogs in the garbage can. My mom smiled and hugged me. The kids in my house were playing with blindfolds, wandering from room to room. I think they had forgotten the smoking man by that time.

After a few minutes I stopped playing with them. I walked to the kitchen window and looked out in the yard. Uncle Steve and Dad stood together by the old red grill, drinking bottled soda and laughing. Dad caught my eye and waved his hand in the sunlight.

I waved back at him and Uncle Steve. I put my arm down and my elbow clicked, ever so slightly.

Mike McCormick Eyes

 

Mike McCormick is a writer from New York City. He is a 2008 graduate of Elon University, NC. He currently lives in Staten Island, NY, where he is at work on his first novel.

Copyright © 2013, Mike McCormick. All rights reserved.

21 comments
MereMorckel
MereMorckel

Wow - interesting. I'd love to see the a family of seaweed and saltwater! 

fuse
fuse

heh heeh heeeeeh hey poopy shut up

Michael Robertson
Michael Robertson

I liked this story. I thought it was well written and realised. The dialogue was sharp.

invisiblestrength
invisiblestrength

The entire story was unexpected and it hooked me from the start. Loved the ending.

Linda L. Rigsbee
Linda L. Rigsbee

That was really cute. I enjoyed it. Nice writing! Kudos.

poopy
poopy

the endings corny

Flash Fiction Fan
Flash Fiction Fan

Oh, yeah...really, well done! Will keep an eye out for more of your work.

Carlie
Carlie

Loved this too! (Sorry, just read Sarah's 'Beholder'). I particularly admire your dialogue, really nicely done, well done.

Udicious
Udicious

This is really really good! Great work, man.

Marduk
Marduk

Creative. I liked it

yodeane
yodeane

I really enjoyed this, the ending was very subtle and very good.

Annecdotist
Annecdotist

I enjoyed this, how the dreadfulness is so matter-of-fact, both at the beginning when they don't want a simple matter of his father overheating to spoil the party, and at the end with the threat of what the boy is to become. Lovely

Chaque
Chaque

Awesome! I love this!

Carolyn Fay
Carolyn Fay

Loved this. Classic flash twist at the end. I was thinking robot story, but then you turn that on its head with Uncle Steve's comments about what different people are made of Well done.

Leximize
Leximize

Rather a '50s throwback story no? Of how robots might have been envisioned during the "Happy Days" era. Or better yet, kind of a steampunk take on dealing with future mixed mode life types.

Linda L. Rigsbee
Linda L. Rigsbee

Interesting. I hadn't thought of it that way. I was thinking more along the lines of people gradually turning into robots.

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